Beau Moran
RS: What can you do to take it past the tongue in cheek joke? The details of the plunger(implies a possible future need) the lack of TP and the fresh roll seemingly out of comfortable reach--these are good details and thoughts. Is there someway you can say this same thing in a different way that isn't so in your face? Ir is there a way to increase the meaning and 'laugh' by having more details. What if the door wasn't all the way open? Its good that you went for broke with the idea for your first assignment.